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And so it seems, my little dreams,
The time has come for due consent --
When will and willing join the dance
And you're reduced to temperament.
What shall be, we eager we?
And who will draw the line?
I give you, please, the sum of me ...
Or you to sleep and time.
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And so it seems, my little dreams,
The time has come for due consent --
When will and willing join the dance
And you're reduced to temperament.
What shall be, we eager we?
And who will draw the line?
I give you, please, the sum of me ...
Or you to sleep and time.
...
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I see you placed this in visual poetry... So is this poem in the description a RoSAy-0 original?? Either way, I really, really admire the poem. It is short, but meaningful and I find it SO rare that rhyme feels natural and well-used, but in this particular poem it just rolled off my tongue and out of my mouth as if it were the most natural thing. Lovely poem.
The visual aspect is so abstract, and I never know how to comment so much on abstract things. I like the form the body takes, as the focal point of the piece, and I find it cool that it is in black and white. What might be interesting as well would to add colour in just one or two small places-something vibrant, but only in a small dose as to not overwhelm the eye. Otherwise, I don't think I have anymore critique for this.
The visual aspect is so abstract, and I never know how to comment so much on abstract things. I like the form the body takes, as the focal point of the piece, and I find it cool that it is in black and white. What might be interesting as well would to add colour in just one or two small places-something vibrant, but only in a small dose as to not overwhelm the eye. Otherwise, I don't think I have anymore critique for this.